Trying to devise a metaphor as unique as you

Posted on 2025-10-20 by Bartholomew Barker

You are the onion ring
in my basket of fries.

A gold finch among sparrows.

You are Moët et Chandon
in a case of Thunderbird.

The supernova blazing
in a night sky
of mere twinkling stars.

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About Bartholomew Barker

Bartholomew Barker is an organizer of Living Poetry, a collection of poets in the Triangle region of North Carolina where he has hosted a monthly feedback workshop for more than decade. His first poetry collection, Wednesday Night Regular, written in and about strip clubs, was published in 2013. His second, Milkshakes and Chilidogs, a chapbook of food inspired poetry was served in 2017. He was nominated for a Pushcart Prize in 2021. Born and raised in Ohio, studied in Chicago, he worked in Connecticut for nearly twenty years before moving to Hillsborough where he lives and writes poetry.
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18 Responses to Trying to devise a metaphor as unique as you

  1. Ezekiel Fish's avatar Ezekiel Fish says:
    2025-10-20 at 20:19

    I love this, it keeps getting better and better. Very romantic!

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  2. DD's avatar DD says:
    2025-10-20 at 22:42

    “The petunia at the end of the universe”. (Douglas Adams)
    ~
    I hope the romance blossoms
    DD

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  3. DD's avatar DD says:
    2025-10-20 at 23:03

    The poem is a lovely progression; no need to dust off the improbability drive.

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  4. berniebell1955's avatar berniebell1955 says:
    2025-10-21 at 04:33

    Well, Bart – you might have noticed that I likes the simple things.

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  5. erroneouschoices's avatar erroneouschoices says:
    2025-10-21 at 12:27

    First two lines 👍

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  6. JeanMarie's avatar JeanMarie says:
    2025-10-23 at 02:05

    “You are the onion ring
    in my basket of fries.”

    My new relationship goal

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  7. LuAnne Holder's avatar LuAnne Holder says:
    2025-10-23 at 07:22

    I get it! Well done.

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  8. Susi Bocks's avatar Susi Bocks says:
    2025-10-27 at 20:29

    And now I’m hungry…

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