First warm afternoon
writing poems windows open
a wasp critiques my work
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A bitey poem, Bart …
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Indeed. His criticism really stung.
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I hope this poem is imaginary.
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It’s as true as any of my poems.
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That’s a great answer
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ahh; that last line elates it :)
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Thank you, John! It’s important to finish strong, especially with a haiku.
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Per California Psychics: “The wasp seeks balance, and it asks if you are engaged in conflict or causes that are right and just or merely manmade. Act and react to situations as if you are the one in control because you are. There’s no need to wave and swat what isn’t really after you. However, if a wasp does sting you, it’s her way of suggesting that you need to be mindful of your own power, your own reactions and respond accordingly.”
To sting or not to sting, that is the question!! 🐝
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So I need to work on balancing that poem, at least according to the wasp.
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Perhaps …. Perhaps not. What do wasps know of poetry !?
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Wasps know nothing of poetry. LOL
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At least not a single wasp. Maybe if the whole hive made the same suggestion…
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Yup, I knew it. You wouldn’t be satisfied with anything less than a harem … (ahem) – hive!
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Bzzzz.
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I wouldn’t brush you off my arm.
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Really brilliant!!!🐝
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Grazie, Luisa!
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🌸🌸🌸
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I have felt your pain and prefer not to do it again.
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You need a thick skin when you workshop with wasps.
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Bart, I love your poem! It’s brilliantly written and hilarious. 😅 I am so sorry you had to suffer for your art! 💔
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I appreciate your sympathy, Cheryl!
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I know criticism can sting, but sheesh!
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And it didn’t even submit anything for me to review!
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;>)
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this is a fun one! ☝️
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So glad you enjoyed it, Annabel!
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I jumped when I opened this post! Ah the joys (and terror!) of writing in springtime.
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Glad the post provoked a physical reaction!
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LOL
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Laughing at my pain…
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