Fraiku: Why I Left Before Completing my Soliloquy

Posted on 2024-09-27 by Bartholomew Barker

At my ex-Juliet’s balcony
Her silhouette cast on curtains
Another shadow melds into hers

 

(for this week’s Living Poetry Prompt)

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About Bartholomew Barker

Bartholomew Barker is an organizer of Living Poetry, a collection of poets in the Triangle region of North Carolina where he has hosted a monthly feedback workshop for more than decade. His first poetry collection, Wednesday Night Regular, written in and about strip clubs, was published in 2013. His second, Milkshakes and Chilidogs, a chapbook of food inspired poetry was served in 2017. He was nominated for a Pushcart Prize in 2021. Born and raised in Ohio, studied in Chicago, he worked in Connecticut for nearly twenty years before moving to Hillsborough where he lives and writes poetry.
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17 Responses to Fraiku: Why I Left Before Completing my Soliloquy

  1. trE's avatar trE says:
    2024-09-27 at 20:19

    Goodness . . . what a bad way to find out she really has moved on. Great poem, Bart!

    I hope you are safe and sound after all this bad weather we had today. 🙏🏾💙

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  2. berniebell1955's avatar berniebell1955 says:
    2024-09-28 at 04:23

    Oh my lord!

    “I saw the light on the night that I passed by her window

    I saw the flickering shadow of love on her blind

    She was my woman

    As she deceived me I watched and went out of my mind.

    My My My Delilah….”

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    • Bartholomew Barker's avatar Bartholomew Barker says:
      2024-09-28 at 10:50

      I had to look up those lyrics but once I tracked it down, I remembered the refrain.

      I was more inspired by Jethro Tull’s Pibroch from their masterpiece album, Songs from the Wood.

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      • berniebell1955's avatar berniebell1955 says:
        2024-09-28 at 12:46

        I didn’t think you’d copied – your words are powerful themselves. It’s just that, growing up in Britain,  Tom Jones singing ‘Delilah’ is part of the sound track of my youth.  I much prefer when he sings Blues & Gospel – but belting out ballads was what he was known for in HIS youth.

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  3. Lisa Tomey-Zonneveld's avatar Lisa Tomey-Zonneveld says:
    2024-09-28 at 08:07

    So much said is so few words. Well done.

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  4. Kirsten Curcio's avatar Kirsten Curcio says:
    2024-09-28 at 11:01

    I saw this happening as I read and felt the blow… Very well done, Bart.

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  5. LuAnne Holder's avatar LuAnne Holder says:
    2024-10-02 at 14:27

    You packed a lot into 17 syllables!

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  6. Susi Bocks's avatar Susi Bocks says:
    2024-10-12 at 16:56

    Oh, no! She moved on!

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